Spenserian sonnet
I'm just a little nervous about dipping my toes into these turbulent waters, but here goes - an inaugural dip. Critique welcome.COCK CROWHe turned and looked upon me - in his eyes,those great...
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Peter ... er, Spin,What a pleasant surprise to find you here! Don't worry -- the water's plenty safe, and I'm delighted that Sonnet Central swimmers will have a chance to be exposed to some of your...
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An absolutely wonderful work ... a sonnet from which all can learn. This is what it is all about -- economy of language, interesting words and rhymes, not a wasted word, depths of images and layers of...
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Hi, Spin.Pleased to meet you & thanx for posting!I enjoyed this sonnet very much. A Spenserian sonnet is a great format for this sad and impressive account. The three quatrains, intertwined by...
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I like this very much, and welcome! I think Dutch is right about "and even yet" seems like wasted space to me, much more that could be said there, to give a sense of place or mood.HOwever I like the...
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I found less fault with your "ahh" and "and even yet" than did my esteemed colleagues, whose advice is at least well-worth heeding.I must admit I paused on "and even yet," but upon considering...
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Dear Spindleshanks,What a beautiful sonnet! I'm of the opinion your thoughts were expressed thoroughly and the imagery was intense.The only nit I have, and I do this too, is the following line:And...
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I have read this magnificent sonnet before - but it doesn't matter how many times I read it I am impressed all over again. It is not just that it's beautifully crafted (tho it is) - added to the...
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Thanks, everyone, for your erudite and informed critique. Im totally impressed with the quality of the critique on this board. A little awed, too - critiquing is an art form requiring almost as much...
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Oops, and I said Judas! Blushing now, she sez I meant Peter, Peter! Jude
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Hi, Peter.You write:"Sorry, Dutch, but the suggested paradox is ugly to my ear."Well, to read this is quite ugly to my ear. I've been very serious about this and am amazed, again, at this choice of...
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Hey Dutch,I'm a mite puzzled here. Given the candid nature of your own critique, which doesn't offend me, your response strikes me as somewhat over the top. I've been very serious about this - hmm,...
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Jude, given the lesson I've just received in forgiveness, what else can I do but forgive you?Keep smiling,Peter
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Hi, Peter.Back to my paradox:"And unreproached, at cock crow in the deeprecesses of the night, I weep and weep."The paradox is: Knowing there isn't any reproach on the part of Christ - hence my...
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